Here is the draft for peer-reviewing:
Organic food is commonly regarded as a healthier alternative to conventionally grown food. The true benefit or detriment to humans and the environment, however, is debatable. Much less pesticide is used on organic farms, which is better for consumers' health. Organic matter is also regularly added to the soil, enriching it such that less irrigation is required. Such rich soil erodes less than that on conventional farms, maintaining productivity. Furthermore, the reduced use of synthetic chemicals means that rare plants and animals are not harmed, preserving biodiversity. However, research has shown that animal manure fertilisers may contaminate food and propagate dangerous new strains of bacteria. Fungi, some of which are carcinogenic, grow more easily in organic soil. Their toxins may cause sickness in consumers. Nevertheless, the wide range of benefits presented by organic production should not be forsaken because of some problems which can be overcome.
Rgds,
Sarah & Sarah
Erm...not sure if you found another pair for peer reviewing, but here's my comment:
ReplyDeleteI think the starting can be improved. Instead of going straight into the topic, you could make it more captivating. Not sure if it's because of word limit.
Points are well summarised, showing a clear structure, and stance is very clear. I feel that it's a good job done, Sarahs. :)